·身份:李华(高三学生)
·对象:外教 Ryan
·文体:邀请邮件
·要点:①邀请理由 ②拍摄安排 ③礼貌结尾
·词数:80 左右
1.开头:表明身份 + 说明事由
2.主体:邀请理由(陪伴成长 / 珍贵回忆)+ 具体安排(时间 / 地点 / 流程)
3.结尾:期待参加 + 感谢
Dear Ryan,
As our senior high school life is drawing to a close, our class is scheduled to take graduation photos to capture the precious moments we’ve shared together. We earnestly invite you to join us.
Over the past three years, you have not only taught us English but also inspired us with your passion and patience, becoming an indispensable part of our youth. The shooting will take place at 3:00 pm this Friday on the school playground, and we will gather at the teaching building gate 15 minutes in advance.
We would be deeply grateful if you could spare your time. Your presence will make this memory more complete.
Yours sincerely,
Li Hua
Dear Ryan,
As our senior high school life is drawing to a close, our class is scheduled to take graduation photos to capture the precious moments we’ve shared together. We earnestly invite you to join us.✅ 得分点 1:高级开篇短语 draw to a close替代 ending✅ 得分点 2:不定式表目的 to capture满分结构✅ 得分点 3:副词 earnestly 提升正式度
Over the past three years, you have not only taught us English but also inspired us with your passion and patience, becoming an indispensable part of our youth.✅ 得分点 4:黄金并列结构 not only…but also…✅ 得分点 5:非谓语作结果状语 becoming…满分句式✅ 得分点 6:高级词 indispensable 不可或缺的The shooting will take place at 3:00 pm this Friday on the school playground, and we will gather at the teaching building gate 15 minutes in advance.✅ 得分点 7:信息完整(时间 / 地点 / 集合)✅ 得分点 8:短语 in advance 提前,高考高频
We would be deeply grateful if you could spare your time. Your presence will make this memory more complete.✅ 得分点 9:满分礼貌句式 would be grateful if…✅ 得分点 10:语气得体、结尾自然
Yours sincerely,
Li Hua
·两段各约70–80 词,总词数150 左右
·情节连贯、动作细节丰富、情感升华
·首尾呼应,主题:善良、坚持、微小善举改变世界
·原文:David 在救济站做志愿,得知食物不足,捡铝罐卖钱筹款
·核心:善良、坚持、解决问题、爱心行动
·要求:两段共 150 词,情节合理,情感积极
Paragraph 1:找爸爸帮忙压罐子→爸爸支持→一起压扁→卖掉得 100 美元
Paragraph 2:把钱送到救济站→Jack 与流浪汉感谢→David 体会帮助他人的快乐
Paragraph 1:David rushed to find his dad and begged him for help. His dad, impressed by his kindness, immediately came up with a solution. They placed the cans on the ground and gently rolled the car tire over them one by one. In no time, the mountain of cans was flattened into neat, small packs, saving plenty of space. The next day, David sold all the cans and was thrilled to earn 100 dollars, his eyes sparkling with excitement and pride.
Paragraph 2:Holding the $100 he’d earned, David hurried to the soup kitchen. The second Jack saw the money, he hugged David tightly, moved to tears. The homeless people smiled warmly and expressed their sincere gratitude. At that moment, David realized that every small act of kindness counts. What started with a simple idea had lit up the lives of those in need, making his volunteer work more meaningful than ever.
David rushed to find his dad and begged him for help.✅ 得分点 1:动作连贯,符合续写逻辑His dad, impressed by his kindness, immediately came up with a solution.✅ 得分点 2:过去分词作后置定语,高级句式They placed the cans on the ground and gently rolled the car tire over them one by one.✅ 得分点 3:细节动作描写(高考必踩分)In no time, the mountain of cans was flattened into neat, small packs, saving plenty of space.✅ 得分点 4:短语 in no time 立刻✅ 得分点 5:非谓语作结果状语 saving…The next day, David sold all the cans and was thrilled to earn 100 dollars, his eyes sparkling with excitement and pride.✅ 得分点 6:高级情感形容词 thrilled✅ 得分点 7:独立主格 his eyes sparkling…高考满分标志
Holding the $100 he’d earned, David hurried to the soup kitchen.✅ 得分点 8:现在分词作伴随状语,满分句式The second Jack saw the money, he hugged David tightly, moved to tears.✅ 得分点 9:时间状语 The second = as soon as✅ 得分点 10:过去分词表情绪 moved to tearsThe homeless people smiled warmly and expressed their sincere gratitude.✅ 得分点 11:高级短语 sincere gratitude 诚挚谢意At that moment, David realized that every small act of kindness counts.✅ 得分点 12:主题升华,正能量(高考核心)What started with a simple idea had lit up the lives of those in need, making his volunteer work more meaningful than ever.✅ 得分点 13:结尾升华,结构完整