一、续写材料
第二节（满分 25 分）
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
I’ve always been a quiet girl in class. I’d rather sit in the back and draw than answer questions and speaking in front of more than three people made my knees shake. So when my English teacher, Ms. Carter, signed me up for the school speech contest, I felt a wave of panic wash over me. “Ms. Carter, I can’t do this,” I whispered, my voice barely audible. “I’ll freeze up, or worse—forget everything.” She leaned down, her eyes warm with encouragement. “Lila, this isn’t punishment,” she said gently. “It’s a chance to find your voice.”
The contest theme was “The Moment I Felt Seen”. I stared at the blank page in my notebook for days, struggling to find a story worth sharing. Nothing felt significant enough—until my thoughts drifted to my grandma. She’d lived with us until last year, when dementia stole her memories and we had to move her to a nursing home. She’d always loved listening to me read my stories, even when they were messy and unpolished. “This is wonderful, Lila,” she’d always say, brushing a strand of hair from my face. One day, I found her sitting on the porch, staring blankly at the garden. I pulled out my notebook and read her a story about a girl and her grandma. Her eyes lit up like stars, and she started humming our favorite song—You Are My Sunshine. That was the last time she recognized me.
I decided to tell that story. But practicing was a disaster. I stumbled over sentences, forgot key details, and once, I ran out of the classroom crying after some classmates laughed when I froze mid-sentence. Mia, my only friend, stayed after school to help. We’d meet in the empty auditorium, and she sat in the front as I practiced dozens of times. “Pause here,” she’d say, pointing to the line about grandma’s smile. “This part matters—let people feel how much she loved you.” When I stumbled again, she’d squeeze my hand. “You’re not just telling a story, Lila. You’re letting grandma’s love be heard. That’s brave.” Her words gave me a glimmer of hope.
注意：
(1) 续写词数应为 150 左右；(2) 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1: The evening before the contest, I visited my grandma.
Paragraph 2: Behind the microphone on that big day, I drew a deep breath and started.
二、故事情节梳理
1.故事开端：性格困境与意外挑战
核心设定：主人公莱拉（Lila）是个性格安静的女生，习惯躲在教室后排画画，极度害怕在多人面前发言。
触发事件：英语老师卡特女士（Ms. Carter）主动为她报名了学校演讲比赛，莱拉陷入恐慌，担心自己会当众僵住、忘词。
转折契机：老师没有放弃她，而是温柔鼓励她，告诉她这不是惩罚，而是 “找到自己声音” 的机会。
2.故事发展：确定主题与唤醒回忆
主题难题：比赛主题是 “被看见的瞬间”，莱拉起初找不到值得分享的故事。
回忆闪回：她的思绪最终飘向奶奶 —— 奶奶曾与她同住，后来因痴呆症被送进养老院。奶奶生前最爱听她读自己写的故事，哪怕故事很粗糙。
关键记忆点：她想起最后一次被奶奶认出的场景：她读了一个关于女孩和奶奶的故事后，奶奶的眼睛亮得像星星，还哼起了她们最爱的歌《你是我的阳光》。
决定演讲内容：莱拉确定要把这段经历作为自己的演讲主题。
3.故事波折：练习受挫与朋友支持
练习困境：演讲练习过程很不顺利，莱拉频繁磕巴、忘词，甚至在一次练习中因同学的嘲笑而哭着跑出教室。
朋友助力：唯一的朋友米娅（Mia）主动留下来帮她，在空礼堂里陪她反复练习，指导她
在关键段落停顿以传递情感，并用 “你是在让奶奶的爱被听见” 来鼓励她，让莱拉重新燃起了希望。
4.待续写高潮：赛前探望与赛场演讲
故事停留在两个关键节点，等待续写：
比赛前一晚：莱拉去养老院探望奶奶，会发生怎样的互动？
比赛当天：站在麦克风前的莱拉，能否克服恐惧，顺利完成演讲？她的故事又会带来怎样的反响？
三、写作思路
核心主题：以亲情为勇气源泉，让 “被看见” 的主题在爱与成长中落地
第一段：赛前探望（The evening before the contest, I visited my grandma.）
场景铺垫：描写养老院温暖的午后，阳光穿过梧桐叶洒在窗边，奶奶攥着一团旧毛线发呆，眼神放空却透着熟悉的柔和，营造温馨又略带伤感的氛围。
互动细节：莱拉轻坐在奶奶身边，拿出演讲稿轻声朗读那段关于 “眼睛亮成星星” 的回忆，读到《你是我的阳光》时，奶奶突然缓缓抬起手，用布满皱纹的指尖，像从前无数次那样拂开她额前的碎发，动作迟缓却温柔得和记忆里分毫不差。
心理转折：莱拉瞬间红了眼眶，赛前的紧张与不安烟消云散，她忽然明白，演讲不只是比赛，更是对这份刻在本能里的爱的传递，内心坚定 “一定要把这个故事好好讲出来”。
结尾衔接：离开时，她把写着 “你是我的阳光” 的便签贴在奶奶床头，带着这份沉甸甸的暖意回家，反复练习到深夜。
第二段：赛场演讲（Behind the microphone on that big day, I drew a deep breath and started.）
开场紧张：描写赛场的氛围，麦克风冰凉，台下黑压压的人群让莱拉指尖发抖，她想起奶奶拂开碎发的温柔和米娅的鼓励，深吸一口气稳住声音，开始讲述自己和奶奶的故事。
情感递进：讲到奶奶最后一次认出她的场景时，莱拉声音微微哽咽，她刻意放慢语速，停顿片刻，让观众感受那份温暖又遗憾的瞬间，台下渐渐安静下来，所有人都专注地倾听。
高潮呼应：演讲结尾，莱拉轻轻哼起《你是我的阳光》，旋律落下的瞬间，台下爆发出热烈的掌声，她看见卡特老师和米娅在台下笑着点头，眼里闪着泪光。
收尾升华：演讲结束后，有陌生同学递来纸条，写着 “你的故事让我想起了我的外婆”，莱拉终于懂得，“被看见” 不仅是自己被他人认可，更是让真挚的情感被更多人看见与共鸣，而她也终于找到了属于自己的声音。
四、写作高级表达
情感表达类
高级短语
a surge of warmth welled up（一股暖意涌上心头）
nerves melted away instantly（紧张感瞬间消散）
eyes brimmed with tears（眼眶噙满泪水）
a flicker of determination（一丝坚定的光芒）
be overwhelmed with mixed feelings（百感交集）
find solace in the familiar gesture（从熟悉的动作中获得慰藉）
高级句子
1.The moment Grandma’s fingers touched my forehead, a surge of warmth welled up in my chest, chasing away all my pre-contest jitters.（奶奶的指尖触碰到我额头的那一刻，一股暖意涌上心头，驱散了我赛前所有的紧张不安。）
2.Overwhelmed with mixed feelings, I realized that this speech was not just a competition, but a tribute to the love we shared.（我百感交集，意识到这场演讲不只是一场比赛，更是对我们之间那份爱的致敬。）·
3.The students around me exchanged touched looks, whispering praises softly, and I could feel a rush of pride and joy spreading through my chest.（身边的同学们交换着感动的眼神，轻声传递着赞许，一股自豪与喜悦涌上我的心头。）
4.Overcome with excitement, I didn’t expect that a story about my grandma could touch so many hearts and earn such warm responses.（我激动不已，从未想过一个关于奶奶的故事，竟能触动这么多人的心灵，收获如此热烈的回应。）
动作描写类
高级短语
brushed away the stray hairs gently（轻轻拂开额前的碎发）
mumbled the speech softly（轻声念着演讲稿）
clutched the microphone tightly（紧紧握住麦克风）
traced the words on the paper（指尖轻抚纸上的文字）
nodded with approval（赞许地点头）
hummed the tune in a low voice（低声哼着旋律）
burst into thunderous applause（爆发出雷鸣般的掌声）
cast admiring glances（投来赞赏的目光）
nod approvingly with tears glistening（泪光闪闪地赞许点头）
wave enthusiastically from the audience（在观众席热情挥手）
lean forward in rapt attention（俯身凝神倾听）
give a thumbs-up gesture（比出点赞的手势）
高级句子
1.With trembling hands, she clutched the microphone, but the memory of Grandma’s tender gesture gave her the strength to calm down.（她双手颤抖地握着麦克风，但奶奶温柔动作的回忆，给了她平复心情的力量。）
2.Grandma lifted her wrinkled hand slowly and brushed away the stray hairs on my forehead, her movements clumsy yet full of love.（奶奶缓缓抬起布满皱纹的手，轻轻拂开我额前的碎发，动作笨拙却满含爱意。）
3.As the last note of the song faded away, the audience burst into thunderous applause that shook the auditorium, and some students even stood up to cheer.（当歌曲的最后一个音符消散，全场爆发出震彻礼堂的掌声，还有些同学激动地起身欢呼。）
4.Ms. Carter leaned forward with tears glistening in her eyes, nodding approvingly at me, while Mia waved wildly from the front row and mouthed the words “You did it!”.（卡特老师俯身凝望，眼里闪着泪光，向我赞许地点头；米娅则在前排用力挥手，无声地比着口型：“你做到了！”）
场景描写类
高级短语
golden sunlight filtered through（金色的阳光穿透）
a peaceful and cozy atmosphere（宁静温馨的氛围）
the hall fell into a sudden silence（礼堂瞬间安静下来）
faint rustling of the audience（观众席微弱的沙沙声）
bathed in the warm spotlight（沐浴在温暖的聚光灯下）
高级句子
1.Golden sunlight filtered through the window of the nursing home, casting soft shadows on Grandma’s silver hair and creating a peaceful and cozy atmosphere.（金色的阳光透过养老院的窗户，在奶奶的银发上投下柔和的光影，营造出宁静温馨的氛围。）
2.As I stepped onto the stage, the hall fell into a sudden hush, and all I could hear was the pounding of my own heart.（当我走上舞台，礼堂瞬间安静下来，耳边只剩下自己怦怦的心跳声。）
主旨升华类
高级短语
find one’s own voice（找到属于自己的声音）
convey love through words（用语言传递爱意）
emotions resonate with the audience（情感与观众产生共鸣）
turn fear into courage（化恐惧为勇气）
the power of sincere stories（真挚故事的力量）
高级句子
1.It dawned on me that to be “seen” is not about being perfect, but about sharing the sincere emotions that connect us all.（我突然明白，“被看见” 不在于完美，而在于分享那些将我们紧密相连的真挚情感。）
2.With this speech, I didn’t just overcome my fear; I finally found my own voice and let the power of love resonate with every listener.（通过这场演讲，我不仅战胜了恐惧，更终于找到了属于自己的声音，让爱的力量与每一位听众产生共鸣。）
五、范文赏析
The evening before the contest, I visited my grandma. Golden sunlight filtered through the window, casting soft shadows on her silver hair as she clutched a ball of old yarn. I sat beside her and mumbled my speech softly. When I hummed You Are My Sunshine, her wrinkled hand lifted slowly and brushed away the stray hairs on my forehead, the gesture clumsy yet tender. A surge of warmth welled up in my chest, and my pre-contest jitters melted away instantly. I realized this speech was a tribute to our love, not just a competition. Before leaving, I stuck a note reading “You are my sunshine” on her bedside, my heart brimming with determination.
Behind the microphone on that big day, I drew a deep breath and started. The hall fell into a hush, and my trembling fingers clutched the stand tightly. Yet the memory of Grandma’s touch steadied me. When I choked up describing her starry eyes, a pin-drop silence lingered. I ended with the song’s tune, and the next second, the audience burst into thunderous applause. Ms. Carter nodded approvingly with tears glistening, while Mia waved wildly and mouthed “You did it!”. A stranger handed me a note: “Your story touched me deeply”. In that moment, I found my voice, knowing sincere love is always seen and heard.
范文赏析要点：
一、 结构对称，逻辑闭环
两段内容分工明确，形成完美的 “情感铺垫 — 高光爆发” 叙事链，字数精准平衡，符合续写的结构要求。
第一段：赛前探望，以亲情积蓄勇气，为第二段演讲蓄力。
第二段：赛场演讲，以勇气传递爱意，完成主题升华。两段首尾呼应，从 “determination”（坚定）到 “found my voice”（找到自我），成长线清晰完整。
二、 语言亮点：高级词汇 + 复杂句式，提分感拉满
1. 高级短语精准运用，画面感与情感浓度兼备
例句 赏析
Golden sunlight filtered through the window, casting soft shadows on her silver hair filtered through 替代普通表达 “shone through”，生动描绘阳光穿透窗户的柔和质感，营造出温暖治愈的氛围。
A surge of warmth welled up in my chest, and my pre-contest jitters melted away instantly welled up（涌上心头）和melted away（消散）两个短语，精准刻画了莱拉从紧张到释然的心理变化，比直白的 “felt warm and calm” 更具感染力。
the audience burst into thunderous applause burst into thunderous applause 替代 “clapped loudly”，突出掌声的热烈与突然，凸显演讲的震撼效果。
2. 复杂句式灵活切换，彰显语法功底
例句 赏析
Golden sunlight filtered through the window, casting soft shadows on her silver hair as she clutched a ball of old yarn 现在分词短语 casting... 作伴随状语，将 “阳光洒下” 和 “奶奶攥毛线” 两个场景自然融合，句式简洁且高级，避免了简单句的堆砌。
When I hummed You Are My Sunshine, her wrinkled hand lifted slowly and brushed away the stray hairs on my forehead, the gesture clumsy yet tender 时间状语从句 + 独立主格结构 the gesture clumsy yet tender，用极简的表达突出奶奶动作的 “笨拙却温柔”，情感细腻，是高考阅卷中的加分亮点。
In that moment, I found my voice, knowing sincere love is always seen and heard 现在分词短语 knowing... 作伴随状语，既是演讲后的感悟，也呼应原文 “找到自己声音” 的主题，让结尾更有深度。
三、 情感递进自然，细节呼应满分
细节呼应原文：第一段中 “brushed away the stray hairs on my forehead” 精准回扣前文奶奶的经典动作，唤醒读者的情感记忆，让亲情的表达更真实可感。
心理刻画细腻：从第一段 “heart brimming with determination” 到第二段 “trembling fingers clutched the stand tightly” 再到最终的释然，莱拉的心理变化有起伏、有支撑，符合人物成长的逻辑。
场景反应生动：第二段中卡特老师 “tears glistening”、米娅 “waved wildly”、陌生同学递纸条的细节，多角度展现演讲的感染力，让 “被看见” 的主题从个人情感升华为集体共鸣。
四、 主题升华深刻，紧扣写作要求
结尾句 “In that moment, I found my voice, knowing sincere love is always seen and heard” 完美点题，既回应了老师 “找到自己声音” 的鼓励，又深化了 “被看见的瞬间” 的内涵 —— 真正的被看见，是真挚情感的传递与共鸣，让整篇续写的立意更上一层。
易青兰，湖南省株洲市攸县一中青年骨干教师，敬业乐业，勇于创新，热爱生活，爱好广泛。她教学业绩优秀，教学教研能力突出。曾获攸县高中英语课堂大赛一等奖；获得攸县＂教坛新秀＂、株洲市第八届“教坛新秀”等荣誉称号。她说希望自己能成为一个眼睛发光、内心仁爱的老师，做教育种福人，以精致之专业，有趣之课堂，丰盈之爱心，立德树人，静待花开。
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